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Dark Bringer

A YA Science Fiction Romance- complete at 103,000 words.

Sometimes it makes sense to fear the dark.

On a planet where shadow and fantasy birth unspeakable monsters, a determined investigator targets a spunky electrician he believes to be guilty of psychic conjuring.  Through her love, he discovers the power of imagination.

 

What judges are saying about Dark Bringer.

 

  • The opening was very, very well laid out: combination of world, plot, motivation, and character building woven together with just enough information to keep the reader informed and not too much to bog the reader down.
  • This story is excellent. The premise is evocative and a very original take on post-apocalyptic America.
  • I would read this book and probably recommend it to everyone I know.
  • I love that it’s a romance, but the setting is so well developed already in the first pages. As an editor, I would love this kind of submission.
  • There was certainly enough here to intrigue me.
  • I wasn’t always certain that I understood what was about to happen, however it was written so well that I was confident that I could sit back and enjoy it as a reader and let the author tell the story.
  • Well done. I love the symbolism in this story, whether it was consciously done or not, well done.
  • I definitely would read this book when it does get published. Best of luck!

East Texas Romance Writers of America’s 2012 Southern Heat Contest

 

  • The main characters are very well developed and the plot line has great potential.
  • I think this is a truly imaginative plot and very cleanly written.
  • Unique and well thought out.
  • HOLY COW. I KNOW NOTHING ABOUT ELECTRICITY AND AN ELECTRICIAN’S JOB, BUT YOU MADE A BELIEVER OUT OF ME. GREAT JOB!
  • LOVE THE SYNOPSIS. YOUR WORD PLAY WITH LIGHT IS FANTASTIC!
  • GREAT JOB. UNIQUE AND UNEXPECTED.
  • You clearly know what you’re doing! This is sophisticated and interesting work that could easily find its way to publication!
  • Writing was very good—definitely publishable quality.
  • Jenvee seemed real and interesting: vulnerable, but with lots of hidden depths that promise to be very interesting.
  • A very imaginative and intriguing premise with excellent central conflict between hero and heroine.

 

North Texas Romance Writers’ Great Expectations 2012

 

 

 

  • VERYoriginal idea.
  • Electricity is well-researched.
  • Jenvee’s goals are apparent early and keep me interested.
  • I can bond with her. Jenvee’s spunk is shown well through dialogue.
  • Reese’s personality is illustrated clearly.
  • Voice makes me love the story.
  • Comparisons are creative and entertaining.
  • Incredible tension/attraction between Jenvee and Reese, both professionally and personally.
  • Amazing descriptions!!
  • The differences between light and dark are very well written. I find myself rooting for both Jenvee and Reese from the beginning pages.
  • Impressive subject matter and creative use of electricity !!!
  • Nice spin on fear of the dark.
  • YOU’VE REALLY HIT ON SOMETHING, THE NEED FOR ELECTRICITY JUST AS YOU’VE CREATED.
  • YOU BUILT A BELIEVABLE, AND A BIT SCARY, WORLD. KUDOS TO YOU!
  • WHAT A GREAT STORY. CAN’T WAIT TO READ THE ENTIRE THING!

 

 

Where The Magic Begins Contest 2011

 

  • Great job on the banter between Reese and Jenvee.  You could see him suspicious and her defensive, but not willing to surrender ground.  Jenvee’s inner thoughts are spot on; I believed them and they brought me into her world.
  • Nothing.  You’ve built a fresh world that appears linked to our own after future catastrophe.  The mixture of the expected seen in unexpected ways is intriguing—and I’m wondering how the Umbrages were created and what about the collared Imaginatives:  people who can make the fantastic real with psychic or magical powers?
  • I like the complexity of your world with various ranks of people (agents, linesmen, Imaginatives, Umbrages).  Society has those interlocking layers and you’re capturing that sense of connectedness well.  Great work!  I read a lot of fantasy and sci fi.  Envisioning a complete world makes for a much better story.
  • Outstanding – creepy, which is just what you intended.
  • Jenvee – Unique, strong, yet fragile in a good way. Bannon – comes across tough, but we see his soft side. Love both characters.
  • The technical details of the setting, along with the characterization were wonderful. My heart is still pounding as I write this.  An Umbrage? Yikes!
  • I expect this to get published, but I might not have the courage to read it—especially at night!FAB FIVE 2010