QueryKombat Fourth Round Update

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My entry made it to the fourth round of QueryKombat, an amazing feat in my estimation. It was one of eight still standing out of the two hundred and thirty starting combatants.

Why didn’t it move on? Well, the other entries were really, really good and I think I choked up when I was revising and lost a bit of the voice in the other versions.

I’m not going to share that rewrite with you. Rather I’d like to show what I came up with the next day.


Turns out, there really was something to the Y2K Scare.

Deep under Milwaukee, pipes burst, gauges cracked and ancient seals opened. Magic bubbled out of the sewers. A third of the population changed into creatures commonly found in Fairy Tales.

Fifteen years later, homeschooled Jude Kozlowski is one of the victims. Though his allergy to light causes him to shift into a troll, he wants the world to accept him as a decent guy, not the “who’s that tramping over my bridge” stereotype. But his huge frame and pistachio skin scare normal humans, and his shyness keeps him from meeting anyone else. Even his part-time paper-pushing job has him working alone. Fitting in seems hopeless.

That is, until Luz Bangor crashes into his cubicle at First Metro Finance, thugs on her heels. When the Fairy Mob kidnapped her brainiac brother, Eric, she and her unpredictable magic become his only hope for rescue. Convinced a ginormous Loser-L clings to her forehead, she begs Jude for help.

Smitten and glowing over the unexpected chance to be a hero, he agrees. Then the villains snatch Luz. Like a knight sans the shiny armor, Jude pursues. He braves neighborhood vigilantes, a spoiled poodle and a troll biker gang to track Luz to Underhill, the fairy fortress. There, the unlikely pair must square off with the Fairy Godmother or lose Eric—and each other—forever.  

SUCKER PUNCHING MAGIC is a YA urban fantasy of 73,000 words, which might also appeal to Middle Grade readers. The novel alternates between Jude’s and Luz’s point of view.

I’m hoping to use this one in my query letter, so if you have some tips or suggestions, I’d love to hear them. Feel free to leave them in the comments and thanks for letting me share with you.